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Old 07-05-2007, 05:56 AM
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Default Contest Results l Poetry l Seven Deadly Sins (June 2007)


Sorry for the delay in posting the results. Some complications arose this time around.

Terrific entries, one and all (look at how close the scores were throughout). Congratulations to writenow30 for a fantastic entry and winning this month's contest.


Results
writenow30 18.75
o'connell 18.5
Josiehenley 18.25
Hekate 18
taliesin 18
starrwriter 18
gary_wagner 17.25
Tau Worlock 17
Simply_Toxic 17
celador 17

Originally Posted by BreezyWriter View Post
Member: Hekate
Title: Sin is the stuff of Fictions writ...
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
Comments: Well this certainly was a wonderful piece. The biggest problem I had was with all those capitals. I wonder what the reason behind them is.
Score: 19/20
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Member: Josiehenley
Title: Seven Deadly Days
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 9/10
Comments: As usual you have written wonderfully. My biggest problem was the repetition in the beginning. The first sentences of each phrase was understandable but could there have been other words that could have been used besides the word ‘I ’.
Score: 18/20
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Member: Tau Worlock
Title: Gluttony
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression:9/10
Comments: Nicely written though there is too much repetition. It is understandable the way you wanted to rhyme the poem. But it would have been preferable to have used several other different words.
Score: 18/20
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Member: Simply_Toxic
Title: Her Deadly Sins
Mechanics: 4/5
Intangibles: 5/5
Overall Impression: 9/10
Comments: The rhyming was nice. Unfortunately there were a few minor errors that took away from the beauty of the poem. In a whole your poem was of unique style with a nice technique. Giving way to a wonderfully written poem.
Score: 18/20
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Member: Writenow 30
Title: Seven Deadly Sins
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 5/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
Comments: Wonderfully written. I liked the way everything was placed. Dark with meaning, giving way to a good understanding of the poem.
Score: 20/20
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Member: gary_wagner
Title: Our Glorious Elected Leaders
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 9/10
Comments: A little different I must say. Though expressing nicely what a lot of people think or heard of what was going on. The poem was a little jarring in its stance. For many of the lines could have been written as one sentence. Instead of putting the phrase into one very long sentence.
Score: 18/20
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Member: Starrwriter
Title: untitled
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 5/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
Comments: This is what I call short and to the point. Almost an ode to oneself.
Score: 20/20
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Member: Celador
Title: SEVEN DEADLY SINS Avaritia Luxuria
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 5/5
Overall Impression: 8/10
Comments: In the beginning I felt bewilderment. As it went on I could see some of the deadly sins. Though I did not get a complet understanding of the poem even though I reread it a few times.
Score: 18/20
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Member: taliesin
Title:
“What are you doing? Right now.”
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 5/5
Overall Impression: 10/10

Comments: Wonderfully written, and delicate almost puritan. The way it was written gave me the impression I could almost read her thoughts. Very nice indeed.
Score: 20/20
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Member: O’connell
Title: Untitled
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 5/5
Overall Impression: 9/10
Comments: Nice rhyming. Though it left me with wonder, not fully comprehending the poem as a whole.
Score: 19/20

Originally Posted by aprilrain View Post
Member: Hekate
Title: Sin is the stuff of Fictions writ...
Mechanics: 4/5
Intangibles: 4.5/5
Overall Impression: 8.5/10
Comments: I loved all the religious and literary references. I would have preferred fewer dashes as punctuation, but overall, very nice.
Score: 17/20
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Member: Josiehenley
Title: Seven Deadly Days
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 4.5/5
Overall Impression: 9/10
Comments: LOL, the lust stanza made me laugh. This was a joy to read.
Score: 18.5/20
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Member: Tau Worlock
Title: Gluttony
Mechanics: 4.5/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 7.5/10
Comments: A lyrical poem best read aloud. Nice flow.
Score: 16/20
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Member: Simply_Toxic
Title: Her Deadly Sins
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 7/10
Comments: Excellent incorporation of all seven sinse. The rhythm was slightly off in a few places, but the rhyme was solid.
Score: 16/20
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Member: Writenow 30
Title: Seven Deadly Sins
Mechanics: 4.5/5
Intangibles: 4.5/5
Overall Impression: 8.5/10
Comments: I like the message and the feeling of regret. Strong poem.
Score: 17.5/20
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Member: gary_wagner
Title: Our Glorious Elected Leaders
Mechanics: 4.5/5
Intangibles: 4.5/5
Overall Impression: 7.5/10
Comments: Yes, but how do you really feel? Very passionate and effective, just a little too in-your-face for me.
Score: 16.5/20
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Member: Starrwriter
Title: untitled
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 7/10
Comments: I suppose I should be shocked, but this one made me laugh.
Score: 16/20
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Member: Celador
Title: SEVEN DEADLY SINS Avaritia Luxuria
Mechanics: 4/5
Intangibles: 4.5/5
Overall Impression: 7.5/10
Comments: I liked the form and description. The meaning, though, was a little too unclear for me.
Score: 16/20
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Member: taliesin
Title: "What are you doing? Right now."
Mechanics: 4.5/5
Intangibles: 4.5/5
Overall Impression: 7/10
Comments: This is very well written with lovely images and sensory description. Unfortunately, I didn't grasp the tie to the theme.
Score: 16/20

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Member: O’connell
Title: Untitled
Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 4.5/5
Overall Impression: 8.5/10
Comments: Great rhythm and rhyme. I enjoyed this.
Score: 18/20

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Old 07-05-2007, 08:18 AM
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Thanks, judges for your review and comments.

Congratulations, writenow30.
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Old 07-05-2007, 11:16 AM
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Same as! Thanks and congrats!
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wow, close race. Well done everyone. no more than 2 points between us all.

aprilrain, it was all about lust. that was the tie.Didn't realise you wanted something more obvious.
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thanks for the nice comments ,congratulations writenow30
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Congratulation to all of you, well done.
Now all I have to do is learn how to write an ode. Better start practising.
Oh and BreezyWriter I know it is slightly repetitious the original reason why I wrote this was for the repetition, and that just did not disappear in the rewrite you have seen.

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Congratulations to all. A good competition. My use of capitalization and the dash is a considered anq quite deliberate aspect of my style. Both are used either to draw the reader's attention to an intended resonance or to render assistance in the interpretation of pause and emphasis. Both uses are not without literary precedent. Hekate
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Old 07-07-2007, 05:06 AM
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Thank you for the kind words regarding this poem.

I really enjoyed reading everybody's poems, and I especially liked the theme behind Seven Deadly Days by Josiehenley--this was a clever piece.

Anyway, I'm sure a number of these poems could have easilly garnered first place. Great job everybody.

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