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Old 08-28-2018, 12:05 PM
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Eyes dim but more clearly see
Sounds remembered not heard
Parchment fingers feel a vision
Summer wine now winter bitter
Every second an eternity of life

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Several reads Vince - liking it more each time for its portrayal of age and wisdom.
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Old 08-29-2018, 12:34 PM
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glad you liked Grace its auto-biographical
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Eyes dim but more clearly see (awkward off the tongue) But see more clearly?
Sounds remembered not heard
Parchment fingers feel a vision
Summer wine now winter bitter
Every second an eternity of life

The second half is very pretty, well done.
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