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Old 07-20-2018, 04:07 PM
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life is an
illusion
imaginary and intrusion
it has light
to add to the confusion
it ain't easy
is the conclusion
see yourself off
before it goes out.

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life is an
illusion
imaginary and intrusion
it has light
to add to the confusion
it ain't easy
is the conclusion
see yourself off
before it goes out.

Hi, please ignore any unhelpful remarks.

Life is an illusion,
An imaginary intrusion,
It has light,
It has confusion,
But before the conclusion,
You must let the light go out.

Something like that, sorry, that was not a critique
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Thanks Chinspinner I like you version also. It feels the same at the beginning but the last two changes it from the first version.
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