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Old 07-31-2018, 10:06 AM
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Assailing Abigail
Diminutive girl from Nut-knuckle.

Tends to egg-crack her
knuckles
Shes to be tiger-watched.

Ambitious canary blonde
An attitude of her own.

She loves to Latin-tango
flesh and milk white bone
I am gonna knock your teeth,
I am Ambitious Abby, the one
with fists of curiosity.

She Popeye-swings her arms in the
air with force, Mike-Tyson boxing
lads in pretend English playground
forts
I am Assailing Abby for short
I hereby K.O you in that gregarious
fort.

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[QUOTE=Chinspinner;747132]Is this an introduction to an all female Justice League?

Assailing Abigail
Diminutive girl from Nut-knuckle.

Tends to egg-crack her
knuckles
Shes to be tiger-watched.

Ambitious canary blonde
An attitude of her own.

She loves to Latin-tango
flesh and milk white bone
I am gonna knock your teeth,
I am Ambitious Abby, the one
with fists of curiosity.

She Popeye-swings her arms in the
air with force, Mike-Tyson boxing
lads in pretend English playground
forts
I am Assailing Abby for short
I hereby K.O you in that gregarious
fort.

Fuck, I loved this, I read it multiple times looking for fault, but I really like it. Good job. Your descriptions are on the nose and so concise, and your characterisation is so swift, and all the time it does not interrupt the flow. I got a clear picture, really liked it, that's all, thanks, bye.
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Old 08-05-2018, 11:17 AM
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Thanks it was for a contest in which i did not win.
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