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Old 09-14-2010, 04:54 AM
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I'm not sure I'm ready for this but here goes....


Let The Tears Fall



I raised them all alone,
so they could have a safe home.
I watched them grow
and sometimes it seemed so slow.
I went to work and went to school
just so they could have a pool
The years went by and how they bloomed,
safe from their doom
They had such a glow,
they never seemed full of woe.
Hugs and kisses were always free,
they never ever bothered me.

Let the tears fall only at night
so as not to give them a fright.
Holding in all my fear,
wondering if he were near.


As they grew they changed some how,
I donít know who they are now.
The anger I see,
really frightens me.
I was their mom,
but am no more.
Some where along the line,
where did I get so blind.
The things they did I did not teach,
to run around and be a leach.
To take from others and never return,
these are the lessons that they learned.


Let the tears fall only at night,
so as not to give them a fright.
Holding in all my fear,
wondering if they were near.


The time has come to say good bye,
so my little children will fly.
The abuse we had has now come to an end,
and I was hoping we could all be a good friend.
The children I once knew,
have now made me feel so blue.
They are on their own,
raising children in their own home.
I am no longer their mother,
apparently they have found another.
The anger I feel inside,
makes me want to hide.


Let the tears fall only at night ,
so as not to give them fright.
Holding in all my fear,
wondering if my anger was near.

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Old 09-14-2010, 05:32 AM
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Hello Raylynn,

I really REALLY like this poem. I am not at all familair with writing in this genre so I will not comment on that.

I have 2 grown children and as a mother your poem touched me deeply. Perhaps I'm saying too much here, but how a child grows and what he becomes sometimes is out of the mother's hands. This is sad to me and this sadness came across in your poem. So did the anger you eluded to at the end.


(only one nit-picky comment: somewhere and somehow are typically one word. Not sure if poetic license allows writing these differently.)
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Old 09-14-2010, 06:14 AM
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Thank you so much for the comment. This was my first submission and to get a positive is very encouraging for... Thanks again Tekakwitha.
I decided to do this one first because I thought that if you have grown children this might be just what you are feeling.
I'm not sure if I'm done with it yet though. I just wrote it about 3 days ago as a way of expressing myself.
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Old 09-15-2010, 07:24 AM
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Old 09-15-2010, 06:43 PM
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Poignant poem, raylynn. I have tears in my eyes.

I have three children myself. I just past the stage
'they never seemed full of woe.'

Quickly I am in the middle of the

'The anger I see,
really frightens me.'

'scant reward for duty done' qote from David Wallace's Twos Company.

Thanks for a poem from a true mother's heart.

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Old 09-15-2010, 07:25 PM
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Thank you very much. I thought it would be nicer to say what i needed to say this way rather than in a letter.
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