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Old 07-29-2018, 11:53 AM
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I watch the perfect words
gather in the stanzas
and glide across the page

with movement pattern image flow
into a single string drawn

and a moment before the end
the arrow thunks

a perfect meaning
bleeds from the bullseye

but despite the chance to see its Zen form
in the temple of perfection

I am always off the mark


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Old 07-30-2018, 08:58 PM
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Clever! I like the play on words here especially at the end. Good job!
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Old 07-30-2018, 11:07 PM
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I'd think you'd have a self-describing poem, if you ended it at bullseye. Everything before that negates everything after.
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I like the basic image here. Nice to see you back KBR btw
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I like the basic image here. Nice to see you back KBR btw
KBR!! I never knew that haha
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A lovely piece much enjoyed. It reminds of a piece I wrote myself funnily enough.
and yes Welcome back long time no heard haha!
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