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Old 06-09-2018, 08:59 AM
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I can’t think of a syllable
to say d-a-r-l-i-n-g
I can’t j u m ble romance,
pendulum swing it blindfolded
like an Alpaca piñata.

You creep beside me as i
sleep
You blow kisses through
late ams by my windowsill
on boring humid Monday
nights in Manhattan.

You sext me via messaging
with starless night gazing
by the veranda
I care better than man tending
a synapse wound bleeding
like bacon-strip grease in rusty
black frying-pans.

Do you really understand love?
Understand my arms when
your with me.

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Old 06-09-2018, 11:08 AM
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Like this. some of the referances are too modern for an old goat like me but I like the thinking . Love is elusive and when you have it you can't hold it in place.
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Old 06-09-2018, 12:25 PM
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“You’re” with me.
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Old 06-09-2018, 01:15 PM
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Alpaca piñata??
have to look this up.

I dislike the word sext for the only reason you cant actually pronounce it. It plays havoc. texting is much better.

the last stanza makes sense.
does anyone understand love is more of a question.

interesting piece
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Thanks you three, I appreciate the comments truly from the bottom of my heart. Thank you!
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