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Old 05-23-2018, 04:06 AM
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an attempt at poetry. comments, please.

adieu

when things turn quiet,
behind those beechwood doors,
not even footfalls
of listless lovers,
from autumns forgotten,
fall timid
on pinewood floor.
when wintry fingers stroke the heart,
and mothballed memories
flicker in argentine fury,
a tempest brief, soon quelled,
the world heaves,
and you're allowed
a final fluorescent moment,
c'est tout. c'est tout.

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Can you do it without using fall twice?
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thanks nick! i'll see what i can do.
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