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Old 02-19-2014, 01:16 PM
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you try to be nice to the ones nearest you
indeed- they are often the ones dearest to you
(unless, of course, you are doing time)

curiously, these ones (or one) can be the source of
great grief

Yes- I am concerned about the fairness of judging
in Sochi
and
the success of the president's policies

but these things have an abstract effect
inside out socks under boots sort of value

it's the ones (or one) you see daily- face to face-
that's the place of prime import

and so you try (and by now you must realize
I mean it is I that tries)


sometimes it is quite obvious where the madness,
the cancer causing condition, the apathy for living
is emanating from

but some things are not easily changed

five fingers (per hand)
five toes (you know)
one nose

the idiosyncrasies of your chosen mate

and so you accept it all best you can and go on
and
perhaps
one day
distracted with your efforts to keep peace in your life
you simply fail to stop at a red light
and
are t-boned on the driver side by a large truck
and
poof!

just like that

parole granted with early release for good behavior


one can only hope

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No, I suppose not.
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I think you are being generous.

This is a nice journal entry or aphorism, but I'm missing the metaphor or simile even. There is a tiny bit of word play, but not enough.

Maybe, I'm a bit thick, but I don't think this is a poem.
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I enjoyed reading this and would probably also enjoy listening to it.
but these things have an abstract effect
inside out socks under boots sort of value
I like this metaphor. Very interesting way of putting it.
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you try to be nice to the ones nearest you
indeed- they are often the ones dearest to you
(unless, of course, you are doing time)

curiously, these ones (or one) can be the source of
great grief

Yes- I am concerned about the fairness of judging
in Sochi
and
the success of the president's policies

but these things have an abstract effect
inside out socks under boots sort of value

it's the ones (or one) you see daily- face to face-
that's the place of prime import

and so you try (and by now you must realize
I mean it is I that tries)


sometimes it is quite obvious where the madness,
the cancer causing condition, the apathy for living
is emanating from

but some things are not easily changed

five fingers (per hand)
five toes (you know)
one nose

the idiosyncrasies of your chosen mate

and so you accept it all best you can and go on
and
perhaps
one day
distracted with your efforts to keep peace in your life
you simply fail to stop at a red light
and
are t-boned on the driver side by a large truck
and
poof!

just like that

parole granted with early release for good behavior


one can only hope



This sort of musing happens when one runs short of 5-HTP.
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fingers on the pulse, Nick. Connections love and otherwise are difficult but you made that clear - age does that as well. But take much longer.
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