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love is a distraction
from the mind deflection
it is possible
the brain so incredible
lowers sensible
the focus is terrible

and so comes along
a tune full of fun
and like a harp
in the middle of song
the body turns to string
in b minor
sounds of a different manner
the complex of vexed
scatter
it worries Othello
it has now a ring of a strong spanner.

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I will wear my heart upon my sleeve, for Daws to peck at.
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I will wear my heart upon my sleeve, for Daws to peck at.
Daws??
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Daws??


Digital/analog work stations
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I am unsure whether Shakespeare had a Digital/analogue work station.
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Digital/analog work stations
Thanks. What is it for exactly?
I have never heard of it this is the first.
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I am unsure whether Shakespeare had a Digital/analogue work station.
Shakespeare? no he had his actors to do that. LOL
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That or a Jackdaw
but that is a passerine?!!
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I am unsure whether Shakespeare had a Digital/analogue work station.


He did. Buckminster Fuller gave it to him when he broke John Dillinger out of prison the first time.
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Nacia I can't believe you didn't know what daws were!
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Nacia I can't believe you didn't know what daws were!

There you go ignorance is my bliss. LOL
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Jesus H Christ, you name it Othello and you cannot recognise a famous quote from Othello...
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Originally Posted by Chinspinner View Post
Jesus H Christ, you name it Othello and you cannot recognise a famous quote from Othello...
I know that is how it is !! LOL
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I really do not like what I did there. Okay the review (critique, whatever): -

love is a distraction
from the mind deflection (need a comma here)
it is possible (do not like these fragments/ single clauses- prefer sentences)
(that) the brain (is) so incredible
lowers sensible (I don't understand?)
the focus is terrible (still not sure what you mean here)

and so comes along (woohoo, a sentence)
a tune full of fun (I like fun)
and like a harp
in the middle of song
the body turns to string ( I like the direction you were going, but this line does not quite work... quivers like a string?)
in b minor (I really like the randomness and simplicity of this)
sounds of a different manner (doesn't work for me)
the complex of vexed (I don't understand)
scatter (if in better context, this one word line could be powerful.)
it worries Othello (Othello was a proud man undone by a Machiavellian villain, whose words I recited above; he was a victim of his own bravado, not sure if he is relevant.)
it has now a ring of a strong spanner. (spanner? ugh).

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Jesus H Christ, you name it Othello and you cannot recognise a famous quote from Othello...


She meant: oh, hello! (A misspelling). Have you ever heard the term happy accident?
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Originally Posted by brianpatrick View Post
She meant: oh, hello! (A misspelling). Have you ever heard the term happy accident?
We all have our blind spots, just most of us don't stare straight at them.
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