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Old 05-29-2006, 12:25 PM
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God Given Talent


GOD GIVEN TALENT

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He's a singer
When he opens his mouth
The words flow like a river
Some people say
He's got a God Given Talent
He's a dead ringer
For Billy Ray Cyrus
The way he looked in '93
He's got a God Given Talent for loving me

He's got rhythm
When he plays his guitar
The girls scream and holler for more
You can say it's a gift
He was born for stardom
I live with him
I know him better than anyone
I know how good he can be
He's got a God Given Talent for loving me

He could have a lot of women
A different girl every night
He makes his way back to me
When they turn out the lights

We've got a future
Money in the bank
And a home out in the country
We'll be together
Long after the music's been played
He's a natural
When he takes me in his arms
He makes it look so easy
He's got a God Given Talent for loving me

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He could have a lot of women
A different girl every night
He makes his way back to me
When they turn out the lights

We've got a future
Money in the bank
And a home out in the country
We'll be together
Long after the music's been played
He's a natural
When he takes me in his arms
He makes it look so easy
He's got a God Given Talent for loving me
He's got a God Given Talent for loving me

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Old 05-30-2006, 05:29 AM
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its interesting, I don't really know what to comment on. It wasn't bad, and some parts were really nice, especially the "he's got a God given talent for loving me" that was nice, but not all of it flowed so well for me. though all in all, good job.
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Old 06-30-2006, 09:48 AM
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I agree with Haunus, the flow was a little iffy, and all over the place in certain places, yet, it was great in certain places. If you tighten it up a little, you got a great piece then
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