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Old 03-27-2017, 01:08 PM
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Write a little
Get a response
Listen to what they say to you

About your style
About bettering it

Respond

Change your way to fit their needs

Now you're finished
They got nothin' to fix
You bore them

Remember

Remember when you wrote because it had to come out

The churning of your guts would give no peace
until
your eyes
saw a piece

A piece of you
on paper
in print

That's it
Forget about them
They ain't real anyhow

The Word
is real


(Christ, I hope this doesn't
piss them off)

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Old 03-29-2017, 01:55 PM
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You've pissed me off mate, I didn't like that at all. Absolutely not called for...get a grip man!.............. . Nice one Mr Pierce, reminds me of me when I first came on this site and got feedback. Some were wanting to see what I'd written as they would have it written, which was an insight into the person offering advise.
Then there were really insightful comments that changed where I split a poem that gave it impact. ..............(Remember when you wrote because it had to come out), That's where it's at.....
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Old 03-29-2017, 03:28 PM
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You've pissed me off mate, I didn't like that at all. Absolutely not called for...get a grip man!.............. . Nice one Mr Pierce, reminds me of me when I first came on this site and got feedback. Some were wanting to see what I'd written as they would have it written, which was an insight into the person offering advise.
Then there were really insightful comments that changed where I split a poem that gave it impact. ..............(Remember when you wrote because it had to come out), That's where it's at.....

Thanks for typing your reaction, kev.
Nice to hear from you.
Trust you are keeping well.
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Good shit Nick.

I read your stuff (not really being a poetry guy) and try to figure out how you do it. You know, the formula. I would love to be able to really understand the essence of how it works. I read a lot of poetry for the magazine and most of it is... something I can't put my finger on, but... narrow comes to mind. Then sometimes, once in a while, there is somebody who leaves something of themselves on the page. Yeah, that's a cliche. But it feels like (from the readers point of view) that there's a small chunk of that human left there in words. A small piece they can probably never get back. That's what it feels like. Maybe it's a myth, dunno. Some musicians are like that. It feels like they leave a portion of themselves there in that moment every time they play. I don't know why that is attractive but it is.
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there's a small chunk of that human left there in words. A small piece they can probably never get back.

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Yeah, that is how it is.

Sometimes it is something you are better off not having in ya anymore.

Like comin' clean about a years long lie.

Sometimes something that was inside, moving without taking shape, gels up into a form on the page and looks ... well, "attractive" is a term that comes to me.

But yeah, once it is on paper there ain't no puttin' it back in that nether dimension.
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'ello! nice style, so moody, so "all about the beat". you could probably fit in something decorative, like only some of the stuff airing right now.
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'ello! nice style, so moody, so "all about the beat". you could probably fit in something decorative, like only some of the stuff airing right now.
Mmmm.

I think about you and ... mmm.





So how is that for "decorative" while maintaining "moody"?
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I feel your point.
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haha, i'll love it. no comment.


Writhe when you type that, missy.
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