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Old 04-28-2017, 12:08 PM
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In a moments reflection the mirror revealed
an unguarded moment that wasn't concealed.
The stranger that stared at me in response,
was one that I knew once.
but that was long before I'd know
how time through bone and flesh would grow
to mould this face with weary wear
reflected through a strangers stare.

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Old 04-28-2017, 01:56 PM
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Just enough.

Beautiful Kev - you captured a moment.
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Old 04-29-2017, 01:13 AM
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Thanks Grace. Rhyme and rhythm seem to set their own pace. One line follows another, whereas prose has to be chiselled out and shaped around it's meaning. Word choice to get the imagery is a lot harder, at least for me....Thanks for responding Grace.
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Yeah, I like it too. Good ending.
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Thanks for your thoughts Lmc
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[QUOTE=kev

how time through bone and flesh would grow

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This is the edge of the piece.
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[QUOTE=kev

how time through bone and flesh would grow

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This is the edge of the piece.

If you're feeling it now, Nick, how are you gonna survive in the jungle. Thanks for your thoughtful response.....Nail on the head.
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Putting aside the response/once rhyme problem and lack of consistent meter which is required of rhyming poetry, I like this poem. You effectively say what you want to say and I easily understood what you are saying. I find the poem interesting and enjoyed reading it. Thank you.
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