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The Ghost of the Thing That People Once Thought was the Loch Ness Monster

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The ghost of the thing that people once thought was the Loch Ness Monster

When mankind realizes they never truly believed in dragons
The thing that people think of as the Loch Ness Monster will be a memory


The miracle streams
Dry as a bone
Hate things in teams
And seething alone


Years spent in wings
The waltz slowly turns
Denying these things
Until everything burns


When man has moved to from beyond, he will no longer reason with ghosts
The fantasy rules will be replaced
By the truths contained in his posts


Connected in vision and wired for sound and filling in Loch Ness with gravel
For clicks, ticks and pops, and jelly-bump smiles
While the spirits begin to unravel


You know what it’s like to die from disease when the feeling is pumped to your brain
Voices that buzz like millions of bees
And you tell your TV that you’re sane


What’s in the pot at the black rainbow’s end that arches out into the void
Where appendix-like hearts who don’t need the answers
Find they don’t even know they’re destroyed


The ghost of the thing that you thought but were wrong
Remembrances of childish dreams
Is what’s waiting for you at the end of that black
Where everything’s just as it seems


When your robot constructs you an outhouse in space and you see you an alien spirit
Remember the thing that you thought you forgot
And remember why men used to fear it

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I'm going to have to read this a few more times to "get" it I think, but it's good, it's real good. Good flow, cool phrasing and images. I especially loved the parts after the two quatrains.

what about this, though:

When man has moved to from beyond,
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'black rainbow', 'appendix-like hearts' - very effective images. Interesting read, thanks.

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I'm going to have to read this a few more times to "get" it I think, but it's good, it's real good. Good flow, cool phrasing and images. I especially loved the parts after the two quatrains.

what about this, though:

When man has moved to from beyond,
Thanks very much for reading this! I think that with 'to from beyond', I was kind of going for a stutter, a hitch, kind of a stumbling block for skimmers. I've been thinking lately about writing some things in a way that forces people to read it the way I want them to. This isn't a big example of that, but it tracks
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