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Old 09-07-2016, 09:05 AM
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John released a long-suffering sigh. "Fine, I will take the trash out."

Would this work if I am trying to express something that is done albeit unwillingly? I want the character to sigh and show a sort of a melodramatic unhappiness and resignation even in doing something as simple as taking the trash out. I do not want to use resigned.

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I think I might make this into a scene with a paragraph or two.

i.e "John can you take the trash out?"

"Yeah, just a minute."

" I need you to do it now, Please."

"OK-OK", John released a long suffering sigh. "Keep your
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Hi jimmy.

It's true that anything can be expanded. But if she is after a lean and mean style of storytelling, I'd say less is more and it certainly let's the understanding explode in the readers mind, then be passive on the page. Just something to ponder. wrc
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I guess "long-suffering" is the right choice then!
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