I like the last two lines - beautiful
The odd use of vocabulary distorts your writing Bot - if something is too illusive, your readers can't connect with it.
Keep the words simple - your writing creates style and mood effortlessly and these are enough to carry basic language elegantly.
"T'was foreknown and once a bushel head" doesn't make sense. What did you want to say here?
Last edited by Grace Gabriel; 04-27-2017 at 11:48 PM..