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Old 05-09-2017, 11:27 PM
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Low at my problem bending,
Kneeling at my mistakes,
All these other issues arise—
Some smaller than ours—Severity
Embracing deadlier prices.

I keep to singing, my busy schedule,
I file the figures away.
What for, my inordinate ruin
Was this all for a mistake?

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Old 05-10-2017, 05:30 AM
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Took a few reads to hear your voice

and yes

what for indeed

I wonder that myself
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what does my voice mean? lol, i hope it's a good thing!
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I found this short poem fascinating. The first stanza took a number of reads until it made sense to me. I hope I got it right. I did hear your poetic voice on the first read. But it is the second stanza that did something remarkable. It made me think of 'When I Heard the Learn'd Astronomer' by Walt Whitman. I have no idea why I thought of Whitman's poem, but I do love the poem. So I mean this as a high compliment. I enjoyed my time with your poem. Thanks.
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