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Old 06-21-2017, 02:22 AM
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if life was
a cul de sac
we would all terminate
having walked slowly
there is an end to anything
that is quickly and
up the wall we would
crawl or fall

but if it is
an open highway
towards the fast lane
we would plough sway
deliberately
taking over speed or run over
because
to moods
we rover

and in the end
we would approach feeling descent
the experience was a near trauma
with a careless aroma

unless repent
the sleek revenge
takes over
there is a way to all that's
nova
and to ride again
might just save the day

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As adorable as you are Nacia, I can't let you get away with "to moods we rover".
(if you need clarification - no, it doesn't make sense.)

You can be a rover or you can be someone who roves, or someone who likes roving....

Rove means just wandering aimlessly, without destination. If you like the word, it would make sense if you said "through moods we rove."

"careless aroma". How would you define a careless smell?

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