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Old 06-20-2017, 11:30 AM
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I want to assure you
that the gentleman serving you
this beverage
(very tall, very skinny, certainly handsome)
has VERY clean hands.
He washes them like clock-work,
every twenty minutes
with anti-bacterial soap
that promises to kill 99.9% of germs
but still that ain't enough for his
exacting standard,
so to take care of that pesky .1%
he actually dips his hands in bleach.
So clean,
the hands of a virgin,
the hands of a man that has not
suffered so much as a parking infraction.

And when his day is done
on that hot-ass bus
where you found him,
he retires to his dim lodging
in a neighborly neighborhood
just a few blocks down
and he power-washes himself
every night.

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Old 06-29-2017, 12:52 PM
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"the hands of a man who has not suffered so much as a parking infraction."

Love that line.

Meticulous habits are seldom isolated.

Bet his sock drawer looks like a House of Fraser display cabinet.
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Old 06-29-2017, 05:24 PM
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This is a really clean poem.

I was focused until the word pesky. If this were my poem I'd just take that word out.

But... like I said. I hate poets anyway.
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Old 07-04-2017, 04:18 PM
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Perfectly evocative. I felt this.
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