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Old 05-24-2006, 07:12 PM
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Song - No count of Teardrops


A million miles cannot change a thing,
whats gone by is set in stone forever.
And I felt the touch of your angel wing,
as it lightly brushed upon my shoulder.

Chorus:
there is no count of teardrops,
that can mend these nights alone.
Nothing will ever stop,
these feelings on their own.

Your grace is greater than the purest white,
shining with the glory of a snowy dove.
An inspiration to keep up the fight,
as I feel the gentle warmth of your love.

*chorus*

Wish I could wrap my arms around one last time,
to laugh again underneath your smile.
To share the memories of what we'd find,
and enjoy every moment all the while.

Bridge:
can you pull me up,
as I'm falling down.
It isnt enough,
in this silent sound.
I have broken up,
and nothings been found.
I cannot stop,
Its all too loud.

*chorus*

I cannot stand here in the thrashing rain,
whipping down like nails deep into my soul.
But I can find the beauty in the pain,
and somehow through my loss I can be whole.

*chorus* x2

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Old 08-14-2006, 02:54 PM
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This is definitly one of your stronger songs. I can relate so easily to this, and hthe pain in the words. The chorus was beautiful. nice work.
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Old 08-14-2006, 03:02 PM
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Another bummed out one, Steve/Thamior/Haunus?

To be honest, I miss you're little happy jump around ones.

This one is good nonetheless... The bridge was fun to get through ...

I don't think i could tell you anything you don't already know.
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Hmm. I'll be back to crit, Haunus. I like this.
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Old 11-28-2006, 05:17 PM
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Very well done! It was very powerful and had a lot of emotion behind it
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Wonderful piece of work. Nice rhythm and flow. Nicely put to get your message out there. I did have some difficulty with the Bridge but once I reread it I felt a deeper pain then the rest of it.

Nice work
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Originally Posted by Haunus
A million miles cannot change a thing,
what[']s gone by is set in stone forever.
And I felt the touch of your angel wing,
as it lightly brushed upon my shoulder. --nice!


Chorus:
[T]here is no count of teardrops,
that can mend these nights alone.
Nothing will ever stop,
these feelings on their own.

Your grace is greater than the purest white,
shining with the glory of a snowy dove.
An inspiration to keep up the fight,
as I feel the gentle warmth of your love.

*chorus*

Wish I could wrap my arms around [you] one last time,
to laugh again underneath your smile.
To share the memories of what we'd find,
and enjoy every moment all the while.

Bridge:
[C]an you pull me up,
as I'm falling down.
It isnt enough,
in this silent sound.
I have broken up,
and nothing[']s been found.
I cannot stop,
Its all too loud. --? This doesn't make much sense. What is too loud?

*chorus*

I cannot stand here in the thrashing rain,
whipping down like nails deep into my soul. --I love the imagery of this line!
But I can find the beauty in the pain,
and somehow through my loss I can be whole.

*chorus* x2
I love this song. It's so beautiful, and the ryhme and flow are perfect! Also, the ideas/concepts placed in here are great. I want to see more posts of yours!
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