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Old 03-10-2013, 12:07 AM
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I guess I need a reason
To breathe and, and, and........
Well fuck I guess I don't know what I want
There's just no words really
A search for reason
is all for naught if fruitless
A reckless meandering,
bound for trouble and chaos
Its easier to go with the flow
than rock the boat and ask why? Oh why
One can get caught up in this mess
All in all,
all is never an answer worth considering
Rather, a question worth pondering
There is value in the question
It and reaches and feels
looses old, untilled earth
A struggle worth fighting for
A Rolling Stone gathers no moss
Nor does it remain stagnant
It sees and tastes and feels
The Wonders of the World open
Waiting and beckoning, welcome in its embrace
It belongs here
Here, There, Where needn't be defined
Where is where it wants to be
There is there for a moment, gone for the next
Here is here as a gift
I guess thats all fine by me

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Old 03-11-2013, 04:09 PM
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Personally I think this would be a better read fully punctuated, however I think you have a foundation on which to build.

The clichés; ‘go with the flow’, ‘rock the boat’, ‘rolling stone …‘, are a massive turn off for me.

The line breaks are predictable, but using a word prog it’s no real hardship to play around with them and develop some enjambment.

Looses should be loosens
ellipses is …


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