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Old 03-05-2012, 12:48 PM
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Despair

Despair has come to me.
This was not my choice.
But up it's crept, you see
in silence, with no voice.

Unmoving in my chair,
My eyes now wet with tears,
I bow my head and stare
ahead to many empty years


I close my eyes, I feel relief.
For a moment I'm not here.
But this respite is only brief.
Despair won't disappear.


Second verse amended to read:

Unmoving in my chair,
My eyes now wet with tears,
I clear the mist, and stare
ahead, to many empty years


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Old 03-05-2012, 09:14 PM
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This reads well. Has a nice flow.

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