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Old 01-31-2011, 07:31 PM
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Cockleburs cling to my double-cuffed
overalls, I squinting through sweat in
eyes set on the marker tree shading only
the end of an unplowed field. The Biblical
admonition echoes the threat of looking
back in admiration incurring a crooked
row ahead. Mollie Mule farts loudly,
stopping at my Whoa, its stink permanent
in the still, heavy air. Futilely, I wipe at
salt-sweat with soaked sleeves before
jiggling leather straps to start the bottom
plow, sloughing dry, red dirt, my stinging
eyes again finding the guiding tree. Finally
standing in the meager shade, I soak my
sweat rag several times with water from the
stowed Mason jar to wet the mule’s eager,
sucking lips before tilting the glass for my own
two, quick sips. Hawing to turn the plow into
the next row, I loosely wrap the reins on the
right curved handle, finding a new target tree in
the distance, thinking only about the second
water jar waiting, as I block any other thoughts
of my future.


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His misery by your words is endearing.

I especially like:

"...I soak my
sweat rag several times with water from the
stowed Mason jar to wet the mule’s eager,
sucking lips before tilting the glass for my own
two, quick sips."

It took me a moment to understand:

"The Biblical
admonition echoes the threat of looking
back in admiration..."

but I'm sure that's more my own fault than yours and once I understood it was beautiful.

I really enjoyed this, thank you for sharing.
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You already know I love your narrative style when writing of your life. You always take me away to where you have been.

I still hear the insects buzzing in the field and trees.

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Old 02-10-2011, 02:29 PM
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You sure the buzzing isn't just in your head? Kidding, okay?
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Ha! Just be sure to wet my lips from the jar of water. BEFORE the mule, please. I know you're teasing, Franklin. t
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