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Old 08-20-2006, 06:30 PM
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I'm tired I'm tired I'm tired of you,
You went with my best friend and left me behind,
Get out get out get out of my face,
I'm tired I'm tired I'm tired of you.

You are the worst thing that happen to me,
Your the one I thought I could trust,
But then you went behind my back and cheated on me.

I'm tired I'm tired I'm tired of you,
You went with my best friend and left me behind,
Get out get out get out of my face,
I'm tired I'm tired I'm tired of you .

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A few little things. One being the main title. I think you meant I'm Tired. Nothing big, jsut a spelling error.

This has a good flow, the main chorus you repeat twice would definitly work out with a little touch up. This could actually be something pretty good with a little added work. Nice acoustic in my opinion. I hope you keep working on this one.
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thanks and ill try i not sure what to had and jsut sould be just
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Just a few minor errors, the title really isn't very creative, and you probably dont have to repeat so much, and you were to forward hide your words in imagery and things like that. i thought it could of been better but it was ok.
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Hey thanks that will helps
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Nice, I like it.
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thanks a lot
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Thanks that means a lot
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