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Old 03-18-2011, 12:00 PM
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What a lost child
the mind truly is

Orphaned by its individuality

Made impotent by its temporal, earth bound designs

Shackled by the ego

Enslaved with an addiction to decision making

Maddened by finite perceptions

Fated to be obliterated
by the demise of its host

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Old 03-18-2011, 03:21 PM
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How disciplined did you have to be to stop there Nick?

This could have gone on forever. Thought provoking indeed.
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Old 03-18-2011, 03:27 PM
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Originally Posted by Redlorry View Post
This could have gone on forever.
Good thing I posted before rereading the first part of Howl.
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Old 03-18-2011, 03:29 PM
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How many avatars have you been through today??
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Old 03-18-2011, 03:40 PM
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Originally Posted by Redlorry View Post
How many avatars have you been through today??
You saw the goat drawing? Kas said I was born in a goat month and Zing!

This is Alan Watts. He was incarnated when the sun was in the Capricorn constellation. Makes him a goat. C'mon, don't tell me you can't see it.

Suggestion: Google his name and click the work/play vid. He was quite a fellow.
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“I saw the best minds of my generation destroyed by madness, starving hysterical naked,
dragging themselves through the negro streets at dawn looking for an angry fix,
angelheaded hipsters burning for the ancient heavenly connection to the starry dynamo in the machinery of night,”

And then it goes on...

Some of the most inspired and beautiful ranting ever heard by man.

I guess yours is nice too.

You manage to say a lot with a little. The last two lines caught me as deeply meaningful. The mind dies with the body eh? Is that true though...? I'd like to think my thoughts will go on with posterity and that although I may not be able to invent new ideas, others will based off the ones I previously thought up. Mind over matter, no?
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The mind dies with the body eh? Is that true though...? I'd like to think my thoughts will go on with posterity and that although I may not be able to invent new ideas, others will based off the ones I previously thought up. Mind over matter, no?
Maybe two minds. The meat mind that tends to the body/ego needs and stops as the carcass cools. Another mind, spiritual-divine spark-indescribeable via words perhaps, that rides and, if employed, guides the meatsack then moves on.

I'm dyin' to learn the truth of this matter.
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ďI saw the best minds of my generation destroyed by madness, starving hysterical naked,
dragging themselves through the negro streets at dawn looking for an angry fix,
angelheaded hipsters burning for the ancient heavenly connection to the starry dynamo in the machinery of night,Ē
"Holy the supernatural extra brilliant intelligent kindness of the soul!"

Last line of Footnote to Howl

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This is great Nick. I would love to see a whole lot more. Get on this thought and keep on going. Or take the lines you've written and blow them out more. Great work!
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Originally Posted by KBR View Post
This is great Nick. I would love to see a whole lot more. Get on this thought and keep on going. Or take the lines you've written and blow them out more. Great work!
Nice you enjoy it, KBR.
It is very formula driven.
True, it could go on forever.
However,
I am already gone to the next phase/piece.
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Hi Nick,

I very much enjoyed the irony of the poem.

It's a neat idea, building up a version of the mind out of popular misconceptions that presents us with a kind of anti-mind construct.

Clever.
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Thanks, Zenith.
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Thanks, Zenith.

I gotta say, Mr. Pierce, some of the comment exchanges rival the work portent.

Agreed, Nick, agreed.
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Read again. I think the following.

swap singularity for individuality
remove it's temporal

addicted to decisions

perceptions finite

obliterated by demise

I like it, but it the poet beauty gets overrun by a too strong a tendency to narrative.
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Somethin' else for your consideration, Ms. B.
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Finally got service, think about cutting, to be verbs and extraneous determines detract from the power of the poem.

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What a lost child
the mind is

Orphaned by individuality

Made impotent by temporal, earth bound designs

Shackled by ego

Enslaved with addiction to decision making

Maddened by finite perceptions

Fated,
to be obliterated
by the demise of its host
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Originally Posted by daes13 View Post
Finally got service, think about cutting, to be verbs and extraneous determines detract from the power of the poem.

Okay.
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