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Old 02-13-2018, 04:58 AM
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Somewhere, am I
High up in the sky,
Spying on all of you—
Like I lived happily
Once, before my time.

Somehow, it turns—
The winding Watch,
My cheapest wit is nigh—
So it spurned on the tide;

Have you seen me before this?
I hide in the waking minutes
A swinging imbalance's Technique,
Like justifying myself would be wrong;

Such money that dollars never spent,
Saved from the Recluse, the Snake—
And then a Moment, within another,
Wherein I fell deeply into a slumber;—

Do you know me well enough?
To treat me as if I was an infant,
When, really—that’s all I’ve wanted,
And again, any dash of this is enough!

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Old 02-13-2018, 01:20 PM
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I’ve just realized that I whenever I read something of yours I always hear (and see) Tinkerbell in my head. That’s evil.

I like it, is it about writing, or creativity in general?
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Old 02-13-2018, 01:26 PM
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I think as if I were is correct, rather than as if I was. To me were sounds better. I used to be a person who corrected grammar papers, but I've forgotten a lot of rules. Here is what Google said:

It will make you sound smarter and it is technically correct since "the subjunctive mood is used to express a wish or possible situation that is currently not true." It's if I were for hypothetical in the present or future and if I was when talking about something presumed true in the PAST

I think it is a lovely poem.
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@luciaphile, it's different depending on plausibility.

@pralina, the point of it is ethereal words and it's about writing styles. bye.
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odd this infant feeling, i wouldn't --
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As I roll this around in my mind like candy on taste buds, I think of the layers of flavor that we all are. The infant lives in the adult and at times is the creative force I like what you do.
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thanks for reading, guys!

@beesauce, very true. those people are not alright
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