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Old 06-21-2018, 09:16 AM
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Lum(Love) is tough,
navigate the FAQ’s
of Kamasutra
Tickle the tongue,
tickle the tongue
with sex positions.

L stands for Lips
U stands for You.

M stands for Make
Make the poem a
lipogram.

Speak languages of Cupid
Tickle tongues, tickle
tongues with Kamasutra

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The only thing is the last word—a repeat.

Yes, you’re talking about the Kamasutra, and maybe if this were a lyric... but, what does the K symbolize that is true about all of us? What is it’s deepest meaning? Is there another word which could encapsulate it?
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Old 06-21-2018, 11:09 PM
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Lum is love?
is that a new word?
liking the word
lipogram
all in all a brief piece, which I like, but nicely written.
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Old 06-22-2018, 06:40 AM
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Lum is love?
is that a new word?
liking the word
lipogram
all in all a brief piece, which I like, but nicely written.

Thank Nacia, is that a Spanish Name by the way? Yeah Lum is a new language that I am creating for my Book The Language.
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Originally Posted by brianpatrick View Post
The only thing is the last word—a repeat.

Yes, you’re talking about the Kamasutra, and maybe if this were a lyric... but, what does the K symbolize that is true about all of us? What is it’s deepest meaning? Is there another word which could encapsulate it?
No I don't think there is another word that can really encapsulate it in a different angle. Unless I use the word orgasm. I don't know what word that would make sense.
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Maybe just remove L3
The stanza functions without it.
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Maybe just remove L3
The stanza functions without it.
Sure then.
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Thank Nacia, is that a Spanish Name by the way? Yeah Lum is a new language that I am creating for my Book The Language.
hello Yonathan I did not know you were creating a new language.
that sounds great
are you asking about my username if it was Spanish?
if it is then I invented it. I used a couple of my real name's initials.
also what is The Language about roughly?
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hello Yonathan I did not know you were creating a new language.
that sounds great
are you asking about my username if it was Spanish?
if it is then I invented it. I used a couple of my real name's initials.
also what is The Language about roughly?
Oh ok, the language is about an adventure with words and giants that look like something out of attack on titan.
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Old 06-23-2018, 09:25 AM
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Oh ok, the language is about an adventure with words and giants that look like something out of attack on titan.
sounds great
tambien hablo espanol un poco
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Oh ok, the language is about an adventure with words and giants that look like something out of attack on titan.


My middle daughter made me watch attack on titan. In the beginning is was hard for me to get into it. But... the story is really good.
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