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Old 07-23-2018, 04:25 AM
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Found this in some old papers I found, from almost thirty years ago. Wife had packed up everything we owned, and my son, and disappeared.

I won't cum in your mouth,
I won't rifle your purse,
I won't leave the seat up,
I will stop if it hurts.

I'll love you forever,
and if worse comes to worse,
I'll drive you to hell
in a Cadillac hearse.

Oh, baby, oh baby,
You were sweeter than life.
Just wish I'd've thought
'fore I made you my wife.

I thought I was happy -
so fulfilled! So brand new!
If only I'd known what
you were planning to do.

You screwed all my friends
and you spent all my dough,
you traded my truck and my tools
for some blow.

You ran off with my son,
and everything that I own,
and left me with piles of bills,
all alone.

So if ever I see you again,
my sweet thing,
I'd appreciate it if
you'd be calm, and not scream

while I squeeze your throat softly -
yeah, right about here -
You say you can't breathe?
...guess I didn't hear...

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If you added some gratuitous profanity, this would make a great Wheeler Walker Jr. song.
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(sneaks away to google Wheeler Walker Jr....)
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Originally Posted by E. Zamora View Post
If you added some gratuitous profanity, this would make a great Wheeler Walker Jr. song.
He don't do poignant.
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Originally Posted by Prodigalson View Post
He don't do poignant.

Oh, I find that his work is very poetic, poignant and loaded with subtext, but it often requires repeated listenings.

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It sounds like a high-school tune. You won't get a better offer than Zamora
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I don't think he was offering anything.
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Mr. Ed said I should use his signature, since he's not anymore. In honor of his good friend Nok, here it is: "As far as smoking a cigar," she said, "I'd not know where to start or how to start." "It's simple," said I, "You light one end and chew on the other and hope to meet in the middle."
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Originally Posted by Prodigalson View Post
I don't think he was offering anything.
tfft. Ok it was noise, I will give it that.
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Hi Prodigal. It just wasn't bitter enough for me. Just kidding (KBR).
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Originally Posted by BrokenPoem View Post
Hi Prodigal. It just wasn't bitter enough for me. Just kidding (KBR).
Oh, I've got them bitter:

"I trust my wife implicitly,"
said one man to another.
"I know she'd never cheat on me -
she'd never take a lover!"

The second man said (to himself),
I trust her equally -
to never say a word to you,
about her fucking me!
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