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'Ing' or 'as' Constructions

These infer that two actions happen simultaneously. Consider these:

Flipping through the book, he found his favourite passage and read it or He found his favourite passage as he flipped through the book, and read it.

Unless the character's a speed reader, he needs to first flip through the book, pause to find the passage and then read it. He can't flip through and read at the same time. Some actions, however, can happen at the same time. For example:

Pulling out his sword, he leapt onto the edge of the water tough and screamed or As he pulled out his sword, he leapt onto the edge of the water tough and screamed.

Decide if it's feasible for two actions to happen simultaneously, or if one needs to happen before the other. It will keep the sentence from being ambiguous and keep your characters from doing something that might be physically impossible.

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