The concepts you have written about are deeper than I think this style of poetry, so quickly rhymed and metered, allows the reader to feel. It might slow it down if you just deleted some of the returns - Kit
Love is lost, tears have dried,
washed away on a crimson tide.
A raging sea beheld by lust,
now a desert of barren trust.
If I did not tell you all the changes you might consider, I would be doing you a disservice, treating you with less than the full respect you deserve. This much I have learned from my years teaching and mentoring writers.
Riverstones let the water flow around them.