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Old 06-17-2011, 07:14 AM
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Default Deja vu


a subtle impression
deeply felt
in a quickly passing moment

suffused with otherwordly overtones
we can't shake off
this inner certainty

that something real
came clothed in the ethereal

we look for fulfillment
of a personal prophecy

and tell ourselves
that reality is touchable

but the sense of something mystic
clings to us like a local fog
for the balance of the day

a far off gaze
brings questions from friends
we are unwilling to address

while we consider the meaning
of a world we can't touch
that can reach
through an unseen door
and touch us


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Old 06-17-2011, 07:29 AM
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I really like this. You capture the essence of this mysterious, mystical feeling very well. I especially like the image of the 'local fog'. And I love the reference to the 'real' in ethereal' - small spelling mistake there btw. Also I think 'prophesy' should be 'prophecy' as it's the noun in this case not verb.

thanks for a lovely read

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Old 06-17-2011, 07:49 AM
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Originally Posted by Nadja View Post
small spelling mistake
May I draw your attention to the third word in the second stanza?
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Old 06-17-2011, 09:01 AM
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Thanks Nick and Nadja! Changes made. I appreciate the feedback as always! KBR
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