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Old 01-16-2017, 01:23 PM
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in the morning as the shave is ending the
bowel starts moving and it's rinse, sit, splash, flush
(yeah, yeah - there's wipe, also)

To almost all who read this "What's the big deal?"
is an average response

They ain't lived a life where having a blade to shave
with, a place to do it and (when there had been enough
food to eat [rare event] ) a safe place to crap
was not the norm

I don't hold their life experience against them

I do wonder if I'm the only one who finds
this (kinda new to me) experience as enjoyable as,
say, driving a new car or takin' a cheerleader
to the dance (I'm guessin' those are happy
moments for the "Have it all" group)

Okay - gotta
get ready for the workday now

Sixty four
and laborin' in a warehouse

Things certainly are turning out well in this
life's Fall Season

Cheers, y'all

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Another!

Do you really have a wife and does she take pleasure in reading about your Shits & Shaves?

Your life here at WB.

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Omigosh!

Am I single with a fantasy mate?

Hey, this could have an upside.
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I often have those thoughts - how great to have a toilet, electricity, a house, everything I have, so much compared to all those who don't have one or more of these devices. Yet I suffer chronic pain constantly! It's unfair every way you look at it.
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"I don't hold their life experience against them."

Kind of reads like you do. I would much prefer a middle that told me why its special to you, without deflecting to the "norm." Fuck the norm. Get as gritty as the stains slowly disappearing amidst the twirl of the flush.

Its antagonizing in a sense, and comes of as sympathetic, blatantly.

I would love to see it less blatant. You can still recognize with those that have experienced the same, without condemning those that haven't.

Still a beautiful piece, but thinking in the public viewing scheme, maybe let your past speak and don't tell the reader what to think.
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"I don't hold their life experience against them."

Kind of reads like you do. I would much prefer a middle that told me why its special to you, without deflecting to the "norm." Fuck the norm. Get as gritty as the stains slowly disappearing amidst the twirl of the flush.

Its antagonizing in a sense, and comes of as sympathetic, blatantly.

I would love to see it less blatant. You can still recognize with those that have experienced the same, without condemning those that haven't.

Still a beautiful piece, but thinking in the public viewing scheme, maybe let your past speak and don't tell the reader what to think.

Thanks.
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Morning (and evening) ablutions have always been the norm in my life, thankfully. But this is a good reminder about just how much we take for granted in life.

There's an increasing homeless problem in the town I live in, and even those with paying jobs have been priced out of their houses, and are forced to live in tents in small shanty towns beneath underpasses.

I can't imagine what it's like to need a pee in the middle of the night and not be able to go because you could be attacked, or all your worldly possessions stolen.

Suddenly having to get out of a warm bed at 2.30am and walk all of 40ft (there and back) is a moot point.
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I agree.^^ We don't think nearly often enough about the mundane problems of people we step over every day - or on. We don't think about all the people who have no clean water, so that we can have cheap electronic toys.

Poetry has always been widely appreciated when it dealt with the heroic and tragic blood and guts of war. It rarely deals with the unsanitary facts of daily life - but should!!
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Poetry has always been widely appreciated when it dealt with the heroic and tragic blood and guts of war. It rarely deals with the unsanitary facts of daily life - but should!![/QUOTE]


Doin' what I can here, Pal.
Doin' what I can.
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