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Old 03-22-2018, 03:43 PM
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Where's my gloves?

They say 30 ain't so bad,
but 15 years of hard work
and hard drinkin'
take their toll.

Been bout 5 years since
I last drove a post.
10 since I had to climb a tree and
section the sucker off.
Roped the last half and
did an over and under.
Pullied round the old
Pecan.

Glad I know the trig
I do.

Missed the window by a few,
thought I had calculated a foot
or two.
At least -
Guess it comes with time,
but figured I'd
have a better grasp
on the whole tangent
cosign thing.

Had help,
19 year old filled with spunk.
But I ain't gonna let some
green punk shoulder a fair load.
I ain't that old.

Got three bottles of Aleve,
Hope its enough.

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Old 03-22-2018, 04:21 PM
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This works.
It is a little abstract for today's geek minds.

But they won't be the ones runnin' into a burning building because they hear a baby screaming over the approaching sirens.
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Holy shit, I think I actually got a stamp of approval from Nick. And no I'm not being condescending. I am genuinely happy right now. Thanks man. You are one of my inspirations.
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You are one of my inspirations.

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Knowing what I do about me I am sorry to see you say that.
Still, it's probably better than going with some dead guy. I mean I can get better but a dead guy's stuff is not gonna improve with time.



Yeah, that's right you revered pompous sons a bitches. It ain't rain you are hearin'. I'm personally waterin' the flowers on your graves.
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Say what you will Nick, but yours is some of the few poetry I can stomach. And I listen to everything you say

Kerouac Blues and Haikus is my latest fad
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I’m hesitant to weigh in on this for many reasons—but I’m a fucking blabbermouth so...

Yeah, I really dug it. Part of it is the working-man shit. I love that shit, and if you can trim trees with some effect, that’s a TRADE that robots probably won’t be able to do for a while. So good on you.

I’m still looking for a formula I can employ for style, meter, all that shit, but I have yet to see it. This one feels natural like many of Nicks (I know it’s more than that). Making a poem feel like you’re just talking to someone is harder than it might seem. I’ve tried, but feeling like a complete homo is a hindrance to my macho-ality. Or something like that.

Anyway, this one feels natural. And that’s the only thing I feel qualified to say. Otherwise... Fuck you—write this in a proper story like a real man.

And that Aleve... good shit they invented. It’s like Percocet without that damn addiction problem—oh, and the GOOD feeling. It does really work for 12 hours.








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Thanks Tim. Really think you should try the poetry aspect once cause your prose is proper fucking gold. The only difference between poetry and prose is format, length, and how many homos quote it, to use your word haha.

Seriously, thank you. That natural aspect is what I want to,cultivate
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Kerouac

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Work your way back from Jack to Herbert Huncke to see the inception point of the Beat thing.
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I’ve tried. I used to write lyrics for songs and I wasn’t really any good at that either. I just can’t figure out the poetry formula. So I just call you all homos and continue with the stories. It’s probably a defense mechanism or some other psychological schism.

There are some I really like, but most of the famous or IMPORTANT ones I don’t.


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I like what you're expressing with this.

My preference with poetry is something that seems to have a rythm or musical element to it -- something with wordplay or something interesting in how the words sound together etc.

It's a matter of preference -- and a cliche to say so -- but I don't really care for poetry that essentially reads like sliced up prose and that's what this feels like to me. I understand that line breaks can be used for emphasis -- and you can use enjambment to do unexpected things etc.

To me, there's got to be something interesting about the form -- or what's the point?

There are a few poets who can transcend what I'm talking about -- Bukowski for one -- but tons of his poems are like powerful little mini stories that just punch you in the gut -- the form is kind of beside the point. But maybe that's something to shoot for.
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I just asked my wife to pick up some Aleve -- I've never tried it. I pulled a lower back muscle (I think) and I'm kind of immobile and it's pretty fucking painful.

It's happened a couple of times before -- I take it easy, do stretches, use a heat pack etc. and in a few days it goes away.

But I got impatient and let my neighbor talk me into going to a chiropractor yesterday -- it's MUCH worse today. I hope that fucker didn't cripple me.
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This poem being sliced up prose is exactly why I wrote a story haha. But I know what you mean rhythm is,something I enjoy and can't replicate.

Aleve is a godsend man, especially extra strength just wait

Chiropractors always make it worse til it gets better
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Heh. It's gotten better in the past without the chiropractor. I got impatient and let the pain cloud my judgement.

I can see how the massage and heat treatment might have worked, but I almost shit myself with pain when he fucked with my back. I'm just now approaching the pain level where I was before I saw him. That whole spinal sublaxation thing just seems like bullshit to me.

The other thing -- he did x-rays -- "to see what was going on" and then he didn't look at them. He said next time. The whole thing felt like a set up to keep me coming back indefinitely. I'm not buying it.
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Yeah he should have looked at them. Honestly, a nice bath with Epsom salt may help
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Yeah he should have looked at them. Honestly, a nice bath with Epsom salt may help

The pulse thing on the shower head massage works.

I had a GP I called last time and got some muscle relaxers -- not the fun kind -- they just made me sleepy. Those seemed to help, but I think it was mostly the stretches that made it better. That tells me it's the muscles -- and not my spine. I don't know -- the whole thing felt shady to me. I won't be going back.

In the meantime, my old lady just arrived with the Aleve...



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Good. Chew a few and sip a beer
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I don't drink anymore -- but I'll chew a few.
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i looked it up and the consensus seems to be Aleve and alcohol are OK -- if you drink "moderately..."
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I always drink.., what the fuck does "moderatel" mean?
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I always drink.., what the fuck does "moderatel" mean?

Only a couple of beers -- like when you get pulled over by the cops.
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Don’t fucking chew aleve!

Unless you’re plastered. Otherwise just take two and lay down. They work pretty good.


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Ha ha. I didn't chew them.

I used to chew my first Vicodin (or equivalent) or half of one to get things going. The horrible taste didn't phase me.
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I decided to take the offered vallium pill before a lab test. They said to chew it. It was tiny and calmed me a little. Saw the bill yesterday in the mail - that one little pill was 65.00. (insurance paid)

I liked the poem. Gotta tree man in the family.
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In can always steal Valium from our dog.
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In can always steal Valium from our dog.


Me and my roommate Dave stole a bottle of Valium From his moms medicine cabinet back in ‘91 (she lived next door). We were out of drugs and thought it might be something. There were about twenty pills and we divided them in half and swallowed them all. We’d been doing acid every week, smoking tons of weed, and drinking bottles of wine we’d gotten from a restaurant he worked for.

They did nothing for me. Not even a little buzz. Dave puked for about two hours. I was about to call an ambulance until he came out to the living room and sat on the couch.

“You alright?” I said.

“I’m okay, now.”

“They make you even a little high?”

“Nope,” he said.

“You think your mom’s got any more pills?”


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Ha ha!

I took my mom's Valium when I was a kid -- but couldn't steal enough of them at once to feel anything more than a little relaxed.

Otherwise, I've never been into benzos. In any recreational quantity, they just make me kind of sleepy.
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And my wife keeps Xanax on hand and I've never been remotely tempted. She takes one before she flies -- and she used to take one before she sang in front of an audience. And she doesn't think I know, but she used to take one before she had to deal with my mother.

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And my wife keeps Xanax on hand and I've never been remotely tempted. She takes one before she flies -- and she used to take one before she sang in front of an audience. And she doesn't think I know, but she used to take one before she had to deal with my mother.


Ha ha! Wife/mother relations.

The first time my wife met my mom was when we told her we were pregnant with our first. My mom has a “wicked” sense of humor and implied it was good her son found a whore... otherwise, she said, “I might have never gotten any grandchildren.”

To this day my wife still brings up the day my mom called her a whore.


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Heh. My mom raised 6 kids and did a pretty good job -- so she considered herself quite the expert and constantly offered her unwanted advice. That's where most of the tensions came from -- especially when our first was a baby. My wife actually did a good job of letting it roll of her back -- I sometimes made things worse by defending her.

Otherwise, my mom was krazy about my wife -- especially compared to previous girlfriends. Despite how annoying my mom could be, the feeling was mutual -- and in a lot of ways, my mom was the mother my wife never had.
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