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Old 09-30-2012, 03:55 AM
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The scissors are in the coffee can. Click, click, click.
I'm snippin' away at some Mexican weeds that have illegally immigrated to Pennsylvania (long way from home, eh Amigos?).

I'm fifteen years old. It's nineteen sixty eight. The Viet Nam war is raging in black and white on TV everynight.
Names of today's killed float down the screen.

You can look for your friends.
Your uncle.
Your brother.

Just saw Pete on R&R. Too soon for him to be in the credits.

The older guys (they're seventeen) give me bags. I pull out the big twigs. Cull out the seeds. Chop up the rest and Zig Zag some smokes.

Between seven and seven thirty evening someone will pull into the driveway.
Out I go, off we go.

Another night of eight track Rock and Roll up and down the south of Pittsburgh hills.


That was a long time ago.
We would demonstrate for Peace.
End the War was our mantra.

We didn't know how it really is in the world of men goverened by, well, I hope they are men.

This was before I found alcoholism.
Before I said I wanna know firsthand and joined the Armed Forces.

Before I found out one of the most valuable things in the world is a safe place to shit.


Now I'm sixty. It's twenty twelve (I did the math for you).

'Nam is unknown to half the U.S. population. Replaced by other wars (Iraq, Afghanistan).

I don't smoke anything, these days.
Alcohol proved useless by nineteen eighty four
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the only can I am involved with is the one kicked ahead of me as I wander down this alley way
of life.


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I remember 1968. I was 22. I was drafted but missed Nam by the skin of my you know what. I got orders for Germany. They put me in a nuclear platoon. We were the biggest drunks on the base.
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Old 10-01-2012, 05:11 AM
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I remember 1968. I was 22. I was drafted but missed Nam by the skin of my you know what. I got orders for Germany. They put me in a nuclear platoon. We were the biggest drunks on the base.

Always educational to see how the work is connected with.

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This is great as an outline to a very hard post to post, I'd wager. Maybe it was easy to post. It is hard to read because I have my perspective to rearrange some things and omit. It is clear from how you framed the sentences and how the format is set that you know your point, know your message, and don't see how it could be more relevant.

That being said, this has potential to really move many people I know. Great energy and motivation behind every sentence. Never a dubious line.
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Originally Posted by maidahl View Post
this has potential to really move many people I know
So share it with them.

(it was any easy post- the uneasy post is always the one not written- yet)
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Old 10-13-2012, 12:37 PM
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Originally Posted by Nick Pierce View Post
So share it with them.

(it was any easy post- the uneasy post is always the one not written- yet)
Very cool! I guess you are never afraid to get naked. Figuratively. Sometimes I find it hard to bare the naked truth. So I lie. It's art. It's creation!
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Fiction is a lie. Great fiction is lying at its best.

Nick, this is the second piece of yours I've read in quick succession, and your delivery is all strength and clarity. I like it.
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Originally Posted by Kempas View Post
Fiction is a lie. Great fiction is lying at its best.
These statements may be true.
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Haha. I always hated that train of thought. "Great fiction is lying.." to you. Here's why.


"There is the Great Lie, the simple fact that the story is a story and not reportage. Fiction writers, therefore are liars -- and they have to be good ones. " George Scithers & Darrel Schweitzer



I don't know. It's hard thinking I'm not lying when I stop talking. Maybe I'm just acting. I don't feel enough by the end of the day. But everything I write really makes sense until I admit I'm lying. I really don't know what I'm talking about. Everything I will ever think or write, someone beat me to it. Even this. And this. And this. What a bunch of liars.

Wow. I am so deep and insightful. Like a well of eternal.... eternity.

Hey Nick Pierce, I would never lie to you. <3ya But someone said that first.

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People stress themselves out about originality and such and thinking about lies and fiction can drive you crazy...

I don't get too caught up in it
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LIar
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Hmm, some comments from someone named "maidahl".

Sure hope things are going well for her.
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funny tadpoles no doubt, people.

About the writing... Where are we? Non-fiction. Ah. Yes. This piece would do well as a condensed blathering. Kind of like Fan Man or Camus, with the periods I'd suggest one long run on paragraph. My scroll wheels broken --- ahah..
No, I enjoy your work too. So keep digging, and I'll maybe buzz back
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