Not my cup of tea but it seems competent enough. The last line, as a synonymic summing-up of the title, is excellent.
Not too sure how L2 works as a description of the title though.
Can I suggest that perhaps a little assonance and a smidge of alliteration would bring a greater unification to the piece.
As I said, these forms aren’t for me, but good work.
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