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Old 02-11-2017, 08:25 AM
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Old 02-11-2017, 05:33 PM
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You ever play Goat Simulator? It's pretty hilarious. You just run around as a goat and butt people with your head and stuff.
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No, but I'll have to check it out. Goats don't get anywhere near enough respect.
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pretty wacky and nicely written (i need to post 4 times cuz im new)
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I just watched that the other night. What an interesting film.
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I just watched that the other night. What an interesting film.
It was.
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It was.


Yeah, Fuck that film. Too many unconscious fears brought up from my childhood. Caan't do it!

Still can't watch The Exorcist either.
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Old 09-15-2017, 06:39 PM
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Yeah, Fuck that film. Too many unconscious fears brought up from my childhood. Caan't do it!

Still can't watch The Exorcist either.
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I understand though, 'The Exorcist' was really well written and shot; I was disturbed.
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Originally Posted by Loser&Loner View Post
Pussy cat _.

I understand though, 'The Exorcist' was really well written and shot; I was disturbed.


I saw it when I was 8. I'm pretty sure the fear propelled me to become an atheist. I was so afraid for months I think my brain just worked out a way it was impossible. To manage the fear.

I also saw Jaws shortly after that. Still don't swim in the ocean or even lakes. Sometimes swimming pools are suspect.

But, I'm pretty much not afraid of anything else. Even things I probably should be.😀
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Originally Posted by brianpatrick View Post
I saw it when I was 8. I'm pretty sure the fear propelled me to become an atheist. I was so afraid for months I think my brain just worked out a way it was impossible. To manage the fear.

I also saw Jaws shortly after that. Still don't swim in the ocean or even lakes. Sometimes swimming pools are suspect.

But, I'm pretty much not afraid of anything else. Even things I probably should be.😀
That movie isn't for 8 year olds! Where were your parental folk?
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i saw Jaws when i was in high school. not so scared. the exorcist scared me shitless. made me need chocolate and a baby blanky. haha, brian's so funny. this whole thread is amusing.

I saw it when I was 8. I'm pretty sure the fear propelled me to become an atheist. I was so afraid for months I think my brain just worked out a way it was impossible. To manage the fear.
as far as the original critique of mine goes:

you have some really nice suspenseful moments. hard to do when writing so short. it made me work on a thriller myself. nice job. solid 8 out of ten. just make sure you space the lines. i already have blurry gamer eyes from dota and partying late. i can't see. MY EYES. MY EYES.

you have great names. i always have matchy-matchy names, like you! great concept. you could have rambled on and on but it shows why you kept it brief. your writing is pretty entrancing. way to go spshane!
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That movie isn't for 8 year olds! Where were your parental folk?


I grew up in the seventies. My parents were probably in Vegas getting their party on. My older brother and sister were 8 and 9 years older and charged with watching us kids when our parents weren't home. That's how I came to see Exorcist. I was so afraid of that movie that I would wet my pants rather than go to the bathroom by myself.
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Originally Posted by brianpatrick View Post
I grew up in the seventies. My parents were probably in Vegas getting their party on. My older brother and sister were 8 and 9 years older and charged with watching us kids when our parents weren't home. That's how I came to see Exorcist. I was so afraid of that movie that I would wet my pants rather than go to the bathroom by myself.
Duuuude, you are so ooooold! Hahahaha jk! Makes sense, thems were different times they were.
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Originally Posted by brianpatrick View Post
I grew up in the seventies. My parents were probably in Vegas getting their party on. My older brother and sister were 8 and 9 years older and charged with watching us kids when our parents weren't home. That's how I came to see Exorcist. I was so afraid of that movie that I would wet my pants rather than go to the bathroom by myself.
Pretty much the same here. My folks were out. But I was older -- maybe 11 or 12. My older sisters where out too -- because they wouldn't have allowed it.

But I was warned, regardless. My older brothers even gave me the option to watch something else -- but I wanted to be grown up.

I'd seen all the scary movies -- Halloween, Friday the 13th etc. etc. but nothing prepared me for it. I remember laughing nervously at the cheesy special effects -- but they didn't make it less scary.

I never let on I was scared shitless, but I had trouble getting to sleep for days.
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Originally Posted by Myers View Post
Pretty much the same here. My folks were out. But I was older -- maybe 11 or 12. My older sisters where out too -- because they wouldn't have allowed it.

But I was warned, regardless. My older brothers even gave me the option to watch something else -- but I wanted to be grown up.

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Had a similar experience with Alien, when it premiered on British TV. I was 9, and was desperate to see it, being a sci-fi fan, well I liked Dr Who anyway. My parents really did not want to let me but I begged so hard they gave in. Of course I didn't make it past the chestbuster scene, was reduced to a mess, and got a huge telling-off into the bargain.

As for The Exorcist, didn't see it until I was 28 but it was still scary. The overall air of gritty realism works so well.
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