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Old 03-27-2017, 05:50 PM
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I'm glad you approve. Now I can sleep easy tonight. Phew.
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Cool story, bro.
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And yet you didn't like my John Fisher story. I'm disappointed in you.
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Yes. There is a strong plot and subplot with a few pretty round characters. You have achieved in delivering a story.

I really liked the introduction of the character "Enigmus". It makes the whole thing flow well.

However, to improve you could think about moving the subplot up sooner. The subplot of the 12 year old being royalty should come with other hints. Maybe make the first chapter a little longer.
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